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 \includegraphics[width=0.9\linewidth]{figs/TheTriangle.pdf}
 \caption{The Melody Triangle\label{TheTriangle}}
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-In this mode, the Melody Triangle is a compositional tool.  
-It can assist a composer in the creation not only of melodies, but by placing multiple tokens in the triangle, the generation of intricate musical textures.    
+The Melody Triangle is can assist a composer in the creation not only of melodies, but, by placing multiple tokens in the triangle, can generate intricate musical textures.    
 Unlike other computer aided composition tools or programming environments, here the composer engages with music on the high and abstract level of expectation, randomness and predictability.   	
 
 
 
 \subsection{Information Dynamics as Evaluative Feedback Mechanism}
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-Information measures on a stream of symbols could form a feedback mechanism; a rudamentary `critic' of sorts. 
-For instance symbol by symbol measure of predictive information rate, entropy rate and redundancy could tell us if a stream of symbols is at this current moment `boring', either because it is too repetitive, or because it is too chaotic.  
-Such feedback would be oblivious to more long term and large scale structures, but it nonetheless could be provide valuable insight on the short term properties of a work.  
-This could not only be used for the evaluation of pre-composed streams of symbols, but could also provide real-time feedback in an improvisatory setup.
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+Information measures on a stream of symbols can form a feedback mechanism; a rudamentary `critic' of sorts. 
+For instance symbol by symbol measure of predictive information rate, entropy rate and redundancy could tell us if a stream of symbols is currently `boring', either because it is too repetitive, or because it is too chaotic.  
+Such feedback would be oblivious to more long term and large scale structures, but it nonetheless could be provide a composer valuable insight on the short term properties of a work.  
+This could not only be used for the evaluation of pre-composed streams of symbols, but could also provide real-time feedback in an improvisatory setup.  	
 
 \section{Musical Preference and Information Dynamics}
 We are carrying out a study to investigate the relationship between musical preference and the information dynamics models, the experimental interface a simplified version of the screen-based Melody Triangle.  
 Participants are asked to use this music pattern generator under various experimental conditions in a composition task.  
 The data collected includes usage statistics of the system: where in the triangle they place the tokens, how long they leave them there and the state of the system when users, by pressing a key, indicate that they like what they are hearing.